What it's all about, II.
So, RoseThorn begins with Adan at peace and the Adanae seemingly in the zenith of their power. War then comes to the neighboring kingdom of Arras, long-time allies, and the people of the city mobilize to their aid. The Adanae fear nothing, for in five thousand years nothing has challenged their might of arms or command of the Mahare. The army marches to Arras under the two eldest princes of the ruling house of Adan, Otheron and Cenith. But the unforseen appearance of the mysterious Black General bodes ill for Adan and Arras alike.
Caladon, the third son of the ruling family, however, travels away from battle on a quest--dangerous and secret. His success, or failure, may tip the tide of war. But there is a shadow at his heels, a shadow that watches and follows as Caladon travels alone into the wilderness.
What will happen?
Caladon, the third son of the ruling family, however, travels away from battle on a quest--dangerous and secret. His success, or failure, may tip the tide of war. But there is a shadow at his heels, a shadow that watches and follows as Caladon travels alone into the wilderness.
What will happen?
posted by Brian Malone at 10:57 PM
5 Comments:
I'm also writing a story, but I am not good at grammar Can you help?
My story very different from yours, aside the fact that we're both writing a fantasy. And I know that yours is more of organized and better and seasoned literature from many earnest attempts.
Wait, I think you're going to detail. We don't know nothing about Arras and you pointed out that they're allies, right? That means there should have been some sort of war between Adan and some other countries, which meant Arras was the one to help Adan and allied with it.
And because you mentioned that no one fought with Adan for five thousand years, with some considering at the work of our world of modernity, Adan must bear some super technology. (at least like an airship. I mean think about it. FIVE THOUSAND YEARS!!!!!!!!!!) And also think about population, the population could be really big since there is no war and that means no massive wipeout (no direct and obvious decreasement on the population rate meaning there could be at least more than 1,000,000,000,000,000,000 people).
Though I think the story started out good. And I think I liked this type of story and I think. . .OH! this book is more like the cup of the world!!!!! But I'm afraid it's only going to be about royal blood right? I'm just saying this because I'm used to books that a peasant or someone of lower society becoming really powerful (like Frodo in the Lord of the Ring)
And I also think that this post is a preview to the book? Then I see that there is just toomany secrets in it. The Mysterious General. . the ongoing quest mysteriously being fulfulled by a royal blood. And if you can, can you please put a post more about the history of Adan after the exile?
And one last question before I go to sleep. . . Are you going to publize it right now? Who is your editor and what company are you willing to send this novel to?
Here's a little more detail: Remember when I said that the Adanae encountered primitive tribes of men when they landed their ship? Those tribes who befriended the Adan founded, in time, the kingdom of Arras. Those tribes who fled into the wilderness remained wild and primitive, becoming the enemies of both Adan and Arras.
Also, I did not say that the Adanae had not been attacked at all in their history, but that nothing had challenged their arms amd magic. Both the wild men--called Skeldings--and other races have attacked Adan, but they have always been defeated.
As for advanced technology, there is none, and none is needed by the Adanae. They live in a paradise by virtue of their magic, the Mahare, and have no need of gee-whiz machines. In fact, they would probably find such things silly, if not offensive. They are an incurious race and strongly prefer to live lives of quiet study and contemplation (mostly!)
Now, with respect to the burgeoning population of Adan, again, there is none. The Adanae are very long-lived in comparison to us--about 250 years on average--but do not reproduce easily. Many couples have no children, and many more have only one or two so that expansion of the population is a very slow business. By the time of this story, there are about 8,000 to 10,000 Adanae.
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